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When love unfinished, vanished in a spark,
how can I trust this love that I have found?
I am left in wonderment to seek
the passing days that fall upon the ground.

The sun and moon and stars are swirled; I'm sick.
I feel as if I bleed--with thorns I'm crowned
and naked left to wander blind and stark
in diamond sparkled blackness I am drowned.

The wheel in my heart which turns every stroke
of truth in all its splendor yet unwound,
but breeze and wind uncover dust-- a speck
and I am lost, embraced without a sound.

    Please take me by the hand and guide the streak
    of lightning rush that pulses veins when struck.

The Sonnet

Date: 2009-03-28 05:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dadu-kobi.livejournal.com
Wow!!!! You really have what it takes to be a wonderful poet!! Just keep it up!!

Date: 2009-03-28 05:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sftstppingshoes.livejournal.com
I think this is fantastic.

love poem

Date: 2009-03-28 06:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altheabashar.livejournal.com
well i can see we're both struggling with a similar theme :)
could we be going thru the same thing in life?
reading your poem, i'm curiously amazed

Date: 2009-03-28 08:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cha-lle-nges.livejournal.com
I love the last two lines the most :) I think that "pulses" is such a nice word haha :)

Date: 2009-03-28 09:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] december-lily.livejournal.com
I am left in wonderment to seek
the passing days that fall upon the ground.


Lovely metaphor. :)

very good!

Date: 2009-03-28 07:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ashdreaming.livejournal.com
excellent metaphors! i love it. it's great! :]
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